REVISED #3
Merry Riana
Merry Riana is a woman
motivator from Indonesia who has been
recognized by the international community. The figure of a young woman from
Indonesia who success as a young motivator and as an entrepreneur and writer to
the international world. She was born in Jakarta on 29 May 1980. She has slim
body, tall, pretty, fair complexion, and thick straight black hair. She is a
chines, so she has small eyes . Although she has a good appearance, she isn’t
arrogant.
Merry Riana was
Famous through her book “A Gift From a Friend” in 2006 which recounted her
experience and journey for studying in Singapore. The book was sold in the
international world, especially in Singapore and South East Asia because it
told about her achievements how to get $
1 million when she was 26 years old.
Merry Riana grew up
from a simple entrepreneur family. She dreamed to study electrical engineering
at Trisakti University. However, because there were huge riots in Jakarta in
1998 then she changed her destination to study in Singapore because not only
the close distance but also the guaranteed security . She studied at Nanyang
Technological University in the Department of Electrical and Electronic
Engineering to realize her dream as an engineer. Study abroad did not mean that
her life was walking fluently. There were many
barriers that had to face by Merry. Without good preparation for study abroad ,
she failed to follow the English language tests in Nanyang and without the
provision of adequate funds anyway, Merry ever borrow funds from Singapore
government scholarship of $ 40,000 that must be replaced after work and graduate
from the college.
In here, Merry
Riana’s biography of her success begins. Reading Merry Riana’s biography will make us more passion to start our success
from zero and always rise from failure. From the borrowed funds, it was not
able to cover all of Merry’s requirement during studies. So, it made her must
work to get income. She began to embrace many varieties of job and businesses,
such as shopkeeper, MLM, and sold stock but all of her effort was failed and
caused a lot of losses. But it didn’t make Merry despair, then she began
working as a financial consultant and successfully sold a variety of financial
and banking products. Finally she could pay all of her debts. She also won
numerous awards from it. To achieve her dream for a better life for their
families and the youth, she founded MRO (Merry Riana Organization) that shaded
the young businessmen who want to success.
Revised #1 (My dream)
Hello friends, My name is Nurkholis.
When I was kid, I had a dream to become a doctor but since I entered
high school my dream was changed because while in high school I majored in accounting.
Now, my dream is to be professional
accountant, for making my dream comes true is not easy. Because I must study
hard to finish my study with a lot of skills which is make me easier to become a winner in the
competition with anyone that want to be an accountant too.
I am more interested to be a public
civil servant than to be an entrepreneur. In spite of being an entrepreneur is
very happy if success and has big income more than to be a public civil
servant but not everyone can be a successful entrepreneur because to become
successful entrepreneur is very difficult. And if I am a public civil servant I
can become an entrepreneur too in my
spare time.
That is about my dreams, thank you for reading.
That is about my dreams, thank you for reading.
REVISED #2
Present tense
1.
Mika sells cupcakes and red velvet
cake to Mita.
2.
Rio expands his business in food
sector.
3.
Rico and friends invest their money
to Merpati Company.
Present Continuous Tense
1.
Mr.Kadafi is sharing his experience
in business.
2.
The employees are working harder to
improve their salary.
3.
Mr. Hamid is wearing a neat suit to
attend some meetings in office.
Past Tense
1.
The costumers were satisfied by our
great service.
2.
Mrs. Kanya promoted her boutique to
provide its profit.
3.
Mawar Company gave half of their
profit to help the others who have-not.
Past Continuous Tense
1.
When the salesman was giving the
discount brochure, the customers run to that supermarket happily.
2.
The company was producing its
product while the supplier was selling the product.
3.
When the stock was decreased, the
owner was buying the product excessively.
Past Perfect Tense
1.
After Indonesian had chosen Jokowi
as a president, the cost of fuel was up and down.
2.
Hadid was very busy after he had
worked as a boss.
3.
They had saved their money before
they made a large business.
Revised #2 (Tenses)
1.
Past tense
- Daihatsu launched the new Terious in Indonesia with a more stylish and sporty, a long with safety and comfort feature a more complete.
- BKPM pushed Japanese investors to invest outside of Java.
- Inflation occured in Indonesia because of rising fuel price.
2. Present tense
- Price of basic commodities increase because fuel is expensive.
- The inflation causes many negative effects for Indonesian people.
- Poverty becomes the biggest problem for Indonesian economy.
3. Present Continues
- The exchange rate is always changing everytime.
- Tax is becoming the biggest income for Indonesian financial.
- Corruption is causing big losses for the country.
4. Past Continues
- While Goverment were debating of power in Indonesia, Indonesian economy was decreasing.
- When the exchange rate of rupiah was decreasing, the gasoline price increased.
- While petroleum was running out, the scientists were developing alternative energy.
5. Past Perfect
- Before Soeharto was ousted, he had corrupted.
- After the price of fuel oil had increased, the price of basic commodities increased.
- After we had sold our product, we got profits.
REVISE #1
Hi, my name is Adhe Eva. I
want to tell you about my dreams. I have a lot of dreams. When I was kid, I wanted
to be a doctor because this job was cool and noble. As the time goes by, I
realize that I do not like science. I prefer to choose social program in
university although I was science program student in high school. I am
wondering what job that suit on me. Sometimes, I want to be a civil servant, a
businessman, even a president. I am obsessive with all of those jobs.
So, this is my plan now.
After I finish my study and graduate from here, I want to work in DJP (Dirjen
Jendral Pajak) or BI (Bank Indonesia). The main reason why I want to work there
is the big salary. I can save half of my salary and create a business in food
sector. I want to build a restaurant which its cost is not too expensive, hence
everyone can taste it and be happy. Then, if the restaurant works nicely, I
will make its branch in different town in Indonesia. It means that I will be a
millionaire soon.
However, I do not want to do
all of my dreams alone. Before I build the restaurant, I want to be married by
someone who loves me. Thus, he’ll support and cheer me up if I am down and
broke. I also want to do hajji with my big family.
So, that’s all my dreams. I
believe I can make it for everyone who always loves me wholeheartedly.
2. I prefer to be a public civil servant because I can
save my money to make my own business.
