Kamis, 26 Maret 2015
Ø I
have dream which is I want to become a Manager of bank,because my parents wants i
am working as a manager of
bank . therefore I want to try to reach
my dream.
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What do you
prefer, being a businessman or public civil servant ?
Ø I
am prefer become a businessman because I can feel daring and temptation become
a businessman and also get many profit but then I understand to becomes a businessman
that is not easily. Sometimes become a businessman can fell disadvantages and mug . and makes
stress. As for a public civil
servant will feel boring ,when a public civil servant is retired but a public
civil servant get their salary .
Ø I will work hard
and always pray to ALLAH SWT that I always
being given by amenity in reach my dream .and my family always support me . and
I want to improve english conversation to applying for work. AMIN.
Hi Wisnu. That is good. I hope that you can reach your dream. Well... Let me give you corrections about this sentences :
BalasHapus1.) " ......I understand to ' becomes ' a businessman", I think it must be written " .....I understand to 'become' a businessman ". In this word " becomes" you must be written " become" without 's'.
2.) "Sometimes become a businessman can .......", I think it is better if you write " Sometimes becoming a businessman can.....".
Am I right?. Please correct me back if I am wrong. Thank you.
okay I am agree
HapusHello Wisno,
BalasHapusI wish your dreams will be come true.
well, I will give corrections for your task :
I think your sentence "...my parents wants i am working as a manager of bank " is incorrect. My corrections is:
1. My parents wants me to work = because after verb should be object.
Hey, I find your sentence is incorrect, ".....support me . and I want to improve..."
BalasHapusYou must be capitalized after fullstop, wisnu.
please feed back me :) thanks.
Okay I admit I was a lot of mistakes, I will revise this task #HANG_OUT
HapusHey Wisnu. I think you must follow your real dream in your deep heart, not your parent want, but that's up to you, that's your choice :)
BalasHapusokay thanks to your motivation for me #KWAK
Hapus