Minggu, 22 Maret 2015
I HAVE DREAM
Hallo friend,my name is Dwi Anis
Safitri, you can call me Anis, I come from the village ujungwatu,subdistrict
Donorojo, Jepara regency,I’am currently studying in semarang state university
the accounting department of economic faculty.,I’am the second child of two
siblings.for the moment I could say was spoiled by the family.because I still
want to be considered a full and did not want away from my family.however I’am
still trying to survive to be child who lived in the boarding house for my future
and my family.
If there is a question, if I have
a dream, of course I said "yes I
have a dream", throughout the course of my life. I have a dream that is
changing. from start to dream wants to be a writer to be a government accountant. I first wanted to be a famous
writer and able to motivate many people, because it is related to my hobby like
making paper and likes to make up stories to paper. it also fits with my
background who do not like math but the ability in the field of writing I do
not elaborated so slowly not honed and difficult to realize these capabilities.
When I was high school I had a dream to become a notary but my parents do not
approve of my dreams because they assume that the law now much more concerned
with fraud and who are able to pay a lot to be given justice, for to realize my dream I was applying to college rather of
semarang state university but I was not accepted, and finally I undo the dream.
For the last one I dreamed to be a government accountant, the accounting does
away with myself because I really like the books and records what I have
experienced that in the accounting books and records relating to the
transaction. but less intelligent weakness in the count and calculate but I
will always try to pursue my dream.
If told to choose between become bussineswoman
and become civil servants, honest I
prefer to be civil servants. because I think that the civil servants his future
more guaranteed until the parents. but behind it I also want to be
bussineswoman, in addition to profit for me, I can also reduce the number of
unemployment which is currently very much in Indonesia. when I later graduated
from of semarang state university bears the degree the economy. I want to work
in the accountant government and can be appointed civil servants. if I do not
want to keep working in the office official or headquarters. And if I later
desired to become bussineswoman I want to be bussineswoman trading company
selling all household needs. and will open jobs for the community Indonesia.
Hopefully useful for families and society Indonesia.
Hello Anis,
BalasHapusI find your sentence is incorrect, "you can call me Anis, I come from..."
1. I think you should replace comma the fullstop. Because your sentence too long.
I think your sentence is incorrect, "I come from the village ujungwatu,subdistrict Donorojo, Jepara regency, I’am currently...". My correction is "I come from the village of Ujungwatu ,subdistrict Donorojo, Jepara regency. I’am currently" You must put fullstop because that sentence is not correlate with the next sentence.
BalasHapusplease feed back me, Anis.
I find your sentence incorrect again, "...college rather of semarang state university but I ...". My correction is "...college rather of Semarang State University but I...". The name of university should be capitalize in the beginning of the word.
BalasHapusPlease correct your punctuations because many of them are inappropiate.
Don't for get feed back me, Anis. Thanks.
thank dani :)
Hapusfor your correct my task
I will review my task because I think my task have many spell eror