Kamis, 19 Maret 2015
My
Dreams
Hello
guys J
, I’m Dewi Ratnasari. I have alot of dreams. When I was child, my dream was to
be a teacher. In my opinion, teacher is a very god job. Because teacher make
their students are clever. If I was to be a teacher, I would continue my study
until college. But my parrents ask me to study to Vocational High School. So, I
think my dream is imposible. I focuss to finish my study and then work in
Company. When I was school in Vocational High School, I was to be an
accountant. Because I majoring in accounting. Since that time I change my
dream. See that news abaout education in Indonesia declining and has alot of
problems like less government sympatic to education in remote areas, the high
cost of educatioton, lack of facilities and the spirit of indonesian children to
school make me to change my dream.
I change my dream to be
an Minister of Education. I want to make
education in Indonesia more better, improving the quality of human resources,
etc. If I became
the Minister of education, I would like to pay
attention to education in remote areas, improve educational
facilities and give information that education is important. Now,
I am studying in university majoring in accounting. I think, I can’t to be an Minister
of Education but nothink is imposible J .
Beside
that, I want to be an entrepenuer too on batik’s clothes. I want built alot of
boutique in many cities in Indonesia and foreign countries. I want too make job
vacancy from much people and perseving indonesia culture. So, I have to collect
alot of skill and network first. Ok guys that’s all about my dreams. J
May your dream come true, Dewi...but please...next time, label (tag) my name when posting...it will be easier to find your message.. tx
BalasHapusi'm sorry miss i'm forget it. oke miss, next time i tag you in my post. :)
HapusDewi , from your sentence, you wrote “god” in the fourth sentence of first paragraph maybe that you mean is “good”. Isn’t it?
BalasHapusyes, you're right ana :)
HapusHi Dewi :)
BalasHapusI think some of your sentences should be :
-- Because teacher make their students are clever --> cleverer.
-- If I was to be a teacher, I would continue my study until college. --> If my dream was to be a teacher, I would ...
-- I focuss to finish my study --> I'm focussing to...
-- When I was school in Vocational High School, I was to be an accountant. --> When I was in Vocational..., my dream was to be...
-- Since that time I change my dream. --> changed
please correct me back if I am wrong, thank you Dewi and Good Luck ;)
Because teacher make their students are clever --> cleverer. (without "are")
Hapusthank you nora for your correct. :)
HapusHi Dewi. This is good. I want to give you corrections about this sentence "But my 'parrents' 'ask' me to study to Vocational High School". I think that it must be written "But my 'parents' 'asked' me to study to Vocational High School". I think that in this word "parrents", It must be written "parents" and in this word "ask" it must be written "asked", because I think that the event happens at the past time. Am I right?. Please correct me back if I am wrong. Beside that, I want to give you correction about this sentence " I 'want built alot' of boutique in.....". I think it s better if you use this sentence "I ' want to build a lot ' of boutique in......". In that sentence you have to add "to" after the first verb if in that sentence was two or more verb. And then, I think that you must use Verb 1 in that sentence as "built", it must be written "build". Beside that you must give space in this word "alot". So, It maust be written "a lot". Am I right?. Please correct me back if I am wrong. Thank you.
BalasHapusthank you fatma for your correction in my task.. :)
HapusI am carefuless about that..